They dwell apart among wolves on the hills. With so much power they hunt people ripping them apart. When he appeared the people also the animals started running trying to hid from them. I wanted to follow them but they smelled me really quick, I hid and they didn’t realise I was there but they were still suspicious. I wish I never saw them they terrorising everyone. I Christian will try to stop this monsters even if I will die doing this. I want to save the humans, to make this city an better place.
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March 1, 2016 at 4:27 pm
Hello Chritian,
Have you looked at the criteria for the Boost badge?
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-writing/boost/
There are points above where you begin to use some impressive vocabulary that suits your overall tone, but you must carefully re-read your sentence structures and edit them to help make your meaning clearer. Are your tenses consistent throughout? How could you correct this?